Ben24x7 Posted September 7, 2014 Share Posted September 7, 2014 I have literally no idea what I was thinking when I wrote this story other than it was just a random thing. I don't feel this story has much point and also its probably either a Poem or a Dramatic Monologue, I just have no idea. Enough about me repeatedly saying 'I have no idea' from Meet The Medic, here is the story (It may look long at first but trust me its really short when you come to reading it): Standing by the burning wreck Watching the scene unfold Still as a statue Not moving Not flinching Who knows what he is thinking? Does he care? Is he Horrified? Is he Joyful? His face is blank He stares at the fire as it goes higher Arms by his sides Standing straight Is he confident? Is he defeated? He's not bending forward nor back Is he even breathing? The only sound is the crackling of the fire Maybe he is listening in As though there are voices within the flames Are his eyes wide open? Closed? Squinting? Impossible to tell He is unaware of his surroundings He's concentrating on the flames Can he see something that others cannot? He's not blinking too much Then... ...a tear drops from his face Is he upset? He's looking down, can't see his face Drops onto his knees Onto the burnt grass Covers his face in his hands No audible weeping Uncovers his face, looks up Tears all over his face Shouts in rage As if anyone can hear him in the sky "Brother, I have failed thee The day came and gone No way around it And who's to blame!?!" ... ...He gets up Wipes the tears from his face Stares down at the ground Turns around and walks away I didn't ask what was wrong I stand, looking at the flames as they die away I turn to the person... ...He disappears into the horizon Where is he going? What exactly happened? I guess we'll never know... Please leave me a reply on what you think. Yajmo 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jimbob Posted September 7, 2014 Share Posted September 7, 2014 It's a very interesting read. Due to the lack of initial emotion in the character, and the inability to tell how he's feeling, I would definitely cast this guy as him if it were to be acted out: You probably won't get that if you haven't seen House. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
aidenpons Posted September 7, 2014 Share Posted September 7, 2014 TL;DR version: Unidentifiable character ragequits. Does it rhyme anywhere? Or is it syllable-based? Whatever it is, it's pretty good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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